Hi, this is an excerpt from a longer piece that I'm working on. I was wondering if I could get some feedback on what to improve, if it flows well, etc. Proofreading would be great :)
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I often wonder what it would be like to have a short-lived escapade with an older man. He would be the...
"He smiled brightly—like a full moon shining in the dark, ominous, night sky. His lips curled up into a wide grin—the smile she had missed for so long. His blue eyes, like a pool of water from the clearest spring, sparkled with excitement and happiness. Her heart swelled with delight, warming to...