Pixie~P'rf'cr
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- Jul 18, 2010
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here is the beginning of my story, The Summer Sun:
“Ahhh. . .” I sighed as I lay back against the soft, warm summer grass next to my best friend Taylor.
“This is the life, eh?” Tay asked me.
Definitely, I thought, shifting the cold soda can in my hand. I wished every day of summer went like this, relaxing, swimming, riding bikes all over town, visiting other school friends at the ______ Beach Club, basically just hanging out all day, every day.
Tay and I live in the unique little town of Bree, Florida. I moved here last year, at the end of the school year, beginning of summer. I went through my whole first summer here in Bree lonely and friend less. But once school came around again I was forced out of the house. It was a good thing though because I realized how many cool people there were here. Tay had almost every class with me, and as soon as she noticed me, the shy, quiet new girl, she came right over and started talking to me. I swear she introduced me to everyone in the whole school on the first day!
Ok, thats all i have so far, and i like it, but what do you think would happen in the story, just from the title and that beginning? Also, critique on what i already have would be appriciated too! And where the blank is(_____) i need a name for the beach club, suggestions there would be great too!
thanks a million
*pixie*
“Ahhh. . .” I sighed as I lay back against the soft, warm summer grass next to my best friend Taylor.
“This is the life, eh?” Tay asked me.
Definitely, I thought, shifting the cold soda can in my hand. I wished every day of summer went like this, relaxing, swimming, riding bikes all over town, visiting other school friends at the ______ Beach Club, basically just hanging out all day, every day.
Tay and I live in the unique little town of Bree, Florida. I moved here last year, at the end of the school year, beginning of summer. I went through my whole first summer here in Bree lonely and friend less. But once school came around again I was forced out of the house. It was a good thing though because I realized how many cool people there were here. Tay had almost every class with me, and as soon as she noticed me, the shy, quiet new girl, she came right over and started talking to me. I swear she introduced me to everyone in the whole school on the first day!
Ok, thats all i have so far, and i like it, but what do you think would happen in the story, just from the title and that beginning? Also, critique on what i already have would be appriciated too! And where the blank is(_____) i need a name for the beach club, suggestions there would be great too!
thanks a million
*pixie*