Can anyone read my introduction for my essay and provide a few suggestions?

[hero1345679]

Can anyone read my introduction for my essay and provide a few suggestions? I need a last sentence.
My father has always stressed the importance of trust. Never missing a single appointment, my father values his credit as a part of his life. As a doctor and later an assistant research professor, my father has to make constant promises and he kept his words valid every single. However, unlike what most people think of him, my father never promises that he cannot keep, but when he does, he would often trying until hearts pours out keep up with his promises. From my father, I learned that there is a price for every promise.
The essay is about how my dad's honesty influenced me

 

[yetlknisht]

It's not clear what your essay is about, so one can't know what the last sentence should be. Because the last sentence of the introduction should state clearly and precisely what the essay is going to be about.

EDIT: Then you need to state in the last sentence of the introduction, in summary form, HOW your dad's honesty influenced you. If it's that you learned that there is a price for every promise, then your last sentence is fine as it is. If it's not that, or if it's more than that, you should say what it is.

 

[JohnSmith]

Um, if it is about your father it is pretty good(aside from a few grammatical errors which slight correction could change), but if it is about trust, it may be best to use examples everyone can mutually connect to, like historical or social examples, rather than purely personal ones.