Can someone check this short Introduction and fix my errors PLEASE REALLY SHORT

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Feminism is a way of life that is viewed by the rights experience and interest of women. Feminism is a movement in which women are deprived of individual choice, opportunity, power, and intellectual recognition. During the decades of the twentieth and twenty-first century trends of criticism were portrayed in books like Pride and Prejudice and Wuthering Heights. These books are often seen from a perspective that criticizes women. Feminist critics usually argue about feminist oppression and the presence of a dominant patriarchal society. The women in this society are usually have to act a certain way in order to be accepted and considered accomplished
 
Sorry, you'll have to explain what thesis you are trying to write because what you've written makes no sense.

* Most people would not say "Feminism is a way of life". It's a "movement", though.
* "viewed by the rights". What "rights"? Right-wing people? Or do you simply mean "right".
* Feminism does not deprive women of "individual choice ...". It works hard to PROVIDE those rights for women.
* "During the decades of the twentieth and twenty-first century" is way too long. And what decades? Use a time period, like "over the last thirty years".
* What's are "trends of crticism"? Do you mean that people tend to crticize the way women were portrayed in those books?
* I don't think either of those books had a "perspective that criticizes women". They had an old-fashioned viewpoint, maybe. And some people critized their portrayal. But the books didn't criticize women.
* By "feminist critics", do you mean "critics of feminism"? Or do you mean "feminist proponents", or simply "feminists"?
* It's a poor idea to use "argue about". Lots of arguments are completely immaterial to the point they want to make. You should use "argue that", and identify what it is they want changed.
* "in this society": what society? The one feminists want, or the one they're trying to change.
 
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