Can you edit my introduction> PLEASE?

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Can you help me edit my introduction of my essay. I need it to sound more sophsicated, maybe bigger words? Would you mind helping me out, you can add more!!

Interwoven brilliantly throughout John Steinbeck's novel "Of Mice and Men" is the use of symbols throughout the story. The story portrays two men who are looking for work in the Great Depression era, in hopes of one day owning a ranch run by themselves. Their so-called "American Dream" does not go as planned, as it ends with the death of one of the main characters, Lennie. (Maybe explain who Lennie is here.) Animals such as the rabbit, the heron and the water snake, and Candy's dog play a major role as symbolism. Steinbeck's use of animals throughout the novel helps to emphasize future events, but it also helps to illustrate a much deeper meaning.
 
Take out "throughout the story" in the first sentence. Change "use of symbols" to "expert use of symbolism". Change "in the Great Depression era" to "during the Great Depression". Take out "so-called" in the third sentence. Change "the rabbit, the heron and the water snake, and Candy's dog" to "the rabbit, the heron, the water snake, and Candy's dog". Change "emphasize" to "foreshadow" in the last sentence.

Those are just nit-picky things, but besides that, it sounds good. :)
 
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