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<blockquote data-quote="Pretzel" data-source="post: 2211408" data-attributes="member: 429896">It&#039;s pretty good!&nbsp; There&#039;s a few little nit-picky things you could change e.g. you are a 19-year-old or you are 19 years old without the hyphens.&nbsp; May I edit your grammar for you, but without re-writing so leaving it in your own words?My name is Chase (it says James but my name is Chase - I&#039;ve gone by this name since Day One - long story!) and I am 19 years old, turning 20 next month on July 12th.To be honest, I have no idea what I want to be; for some reason I haven&#039;t had a &#039;true calling&#039; but I&#039;ll find it sooner or later, I hope.I was born in Crescent City, California, and moved to Ukiah when I was two, but I&#039;ve re-visited Crescent City and also Smith River ever since I was little because [or &quot;so&quot; ?] they&#039;re like a second and third home to me.&nbsp; Crescent City and Smith River are beautiful places, right on the ocean, and both towns are really small but truly breathtaking. [note:&nbsp; if they were &quot;surrounded&quot; by the ocean they&#039;d be islands.&nbsp; Smith River on the map looks as if it&#039;s inland - you&#039;d know better than I! but just watch for accuracy.&nbsp; Maybe &quot;right by the ocean&quot;?]This may sound far-fetched but I would love to be a best-selling author.&nbsp; Writing is very important to me, and I&#039;m currently working on three books.&nbsp; It&#039;s definitely a tough business, being an author, but I hope I can break into it somehow, some way [or some way, some day].And last, I would truly love to visit the United Kingdom because of its history, beauty, and architecture.One note:&nbsp; You say you&#039;ve no idea what you want to be, and you also say you&#039;d love to be a writer.&nbsp;&nbsp; ?Good luck!</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Pretzel, post: 2211408, member: 429896"] It's pretty good! There's a few little nit-picky things you could change e.g. you are a 19-year-old or you are 19 years old without the hyphens. May I edit your grammar for you, but without re-writing so leaving it in your own words? My name is Chase (it says James but my name is Chase - I've gone by this name since Day One - long story!) and I am 19 years old, turning 20 next month on July 12th. To be honest, I have no idea what I want to be; for some reason I haven't had a 'true calling' but I'll find it sooner or later, I hope. I was born in Crescent City, California, and moved to Ukiah when I was two, but I've re-visited Crescent City and also Smith River ever since I was little because [or "so" ?] they're like a second and third home to me. Crescent City and Smith River are beautiful places, right on the ocean, and both towns are really small but truly breathtaking. [note: if they were "surrounded" by the ocean they'd be islands. Smith River on the map looks as if it's inland - you'd know better than I! but just watch for accuracy. Maybe "right by the ocean"?] This may sound far-fetched but I would love to be a best-selling author. Writing is very important to me, and I'm currently working on three books. It's definitely a tough business, being an author, but I hope I can break into it somehow, some way [or some way, some day]. And last, I would truly love to visit the United Kingdom because of its history, beauty, and architecture. One note: You say you've no idea what you want to be, and you also say you'd love to be a writer. ? Good luck! [/QUOTE]

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