i need help with my conversation?

Jane

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Catherine is a slut, she tells jean about her date.

“Jean!” Catherine yelled flipping the light switch.
“Oh, its you,” Jean said pleased.
“Who else? Anyway I have to tell you what happened,” Catherine said laughing.
“What happened? Did you buy him a meal?”
“No that is not what happened at all, he was a nice guy and bought food for me.”
“Wow really?” Jean asked.
“Just coffee and a blueberry muffin, then we went to his house and w-”
“Wait, don’t tell me. You guys talked and he kissed you and then-”
“No!”
“What then?” Jean said rubbing her eyes.
“We talked that all, then he told me he lives has family in my town and one day he will come and visit.”
“That’s good, we are so far from your town, I think it’s right hours.”


(rewrite for the better and win or give me tips to improve)
 
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