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Message: <blockquote data-quote="Jane" data-source="post: 2531543" data-attributes="member: 218349">(Jean left town after putting her friend in the hospital. she lied to her friend making her cut herself so now she feels guilty)“Why have I been crying so much?” She asked herself. In California she never felt weak, she always fought back and always got the last word during petty fights especially when it came to her sister. ‘No one will ever get the best of me.’ She always fought back when she needed to. Jean suddenly reminisced of how it had been before she started lying and how great it felt to hug Catherine after arriving in her town from the airport. She never thought things would end so ugly before Jean left the hospital.(What do you think? Rewrite this for the better and win or give me TIPS)this is the introduction toto one of the last chapters of my novel</blockquote>