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In my story, there was an attack. what do u think? i just need a review.?
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<blockquote data-quote="Jane" data-source="post: 2617201" data-attributes="member: 218349"><p>Catherine saw Jean crying into a small pillow while she lay on her side, her ribs felt broken. "What happened Jean?" Catherine asked scared to hear the truth. She sat next to her and hugged Jean's head with one arm. The room was quiet, Jean and Catherine could hear Rico yelling at his friend to leave with him. B walked back into the room and slammed the door behind him. </p><p> </p><p> "That guy is dead when I see him again!” B Screamed. </p><p> Catherine crossed her arms and huffed, "you better calm down, I had enough of this."</p><p> "It was crazy Catherine, Rico jumped on me when I was in bed," Jean sobbed.</p><p> "Rico wouldn’t… I’m sorry." Catherine said in disbelief. </p><p> "It’s true, he really is no good."</p><p> Catherine instantly looked at Jean." Jean is anything broken? Are you okay?"</p><p> "He pulled my hair and … my scalp hurts but I'm fine," Jean answered staring at the floor. </p><p></p><p>(see any errors, let me kno plz0</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="Jane, post: 2617201, member: 218349"] Catherine saw Jean crying into a small pillow while she lay on her side, her ribs felt broken. "What happened Jean?" Catherine asked scared to hear the truth. She sat next to her and hugged Jean's head with one arm. The room was quiet, Jean and Catherine could hear Rico yelling at his friend to leave with him. B walked back into the room and slammed the door behind him. "That guy is dead when I see him again!” B Screamed. Catherine crossed her arms and huffed, "you better calm down, I had enough of this." "It was crazy Catherine, Rico jumped on me when I was in bed," Jean sobbed. "Rico wouldn’t… I’m sorry." Catherine said in disbelief. "It’s true, he really is no good." Catherine instantly looked at Jean." Jean is anything broken? Are you okay?" "He pulled my hair and … my scalp hurts but I'm fine," Jean answered staring at the floor. (see any errors, let me kno plz0 [/QUOTE]
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