This comes from a random part of my novel, so the context won't make any sense to you. But I'm trying to describe huge doors opening in a city wall (it's a fantasy). Is it effective description? Do you have any suggestions for improvements?
And then, before their drooping eyes, the doors began to creak open, like an eagle waking after a sleep. The brown wings shuddered, and then swept slowly open, gliding across the ground, vibrating the dust with their great beats. And through the doors shone a great colossal ball of yellow, breaking from its tangle of darkness. The light still blinded the Elf and the Man as they ran through the gaping split in the grey wall.
And then, before their drooping eyes, the doors began to creak open, like an eagle waking after a sleep. The brown wings shuddered, and then swept slowly open, gliding across the ground, vibrating the dust with their great beats. And through the doors shone a great colossal ball of yellow, breaking from its tangle of darkness. The light still blinded the Elf and the Man as they ran through the gaping split in the grey wall.