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<blockquote data-quote="JJGress" data-source="post: 2152287" data-attributes="member: 763245"><p>Where's the plot. At this point I can't even guess where this is going. If I can't get involved in the story I can't continue to read it.</p><p>Who is taking these pills?</p><p>Why is he taking them?</p><p>Where?</p><p>All these things have to be included for it to form a story. Right now what you have is just some random side effect on three types of pills. You have no hook to keep the readers going.</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="JJGress, post: 2152287, member: 763245"] Where's the plot. At this point I can't even guess where this is going. If I can't get involved in the story I can't continue to read it. Who is taking these pills? Why is he taking them? Where? All these things have to be included for it to form a story. Right now what you have is just some random side effect on three types of pills. You have no hook to keep the readers going. [/QUOTE]
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