...read this? pretty pleeease? Vixen
Creature, creature, oh dog so sly-
Who lives beneath the dampest earth.
O feral thing who's pleasure be wry,
She bathes beneath the dawn's new birth.
Her paws so light- and nimble, too,
The reddened fur that weaves in grass.
On her intimates ear she will softly chew,
Yawn and squint the eyes of brass.
Something within the reach of her eye,
With risen ears of a wary hunt.
The vixen creeps upon the one she will spy,
As her waiting mate rumbles a deepened grunt.
The pointed tail will follow her limbs,
That sweep across the heather land.
Through dagger teeth, the feeding hymns,
To pierce rabbit's flesh of her hunt not planned.
Creature, creature, oh dog so sly-
Who prowls between the shaded place.
O slender thing with sense so shy,
She dashes beyond the forgotten race.
ok sorry if i didn't make it clear enough...
could you read it and tell me whta you think of it?
i don't mind if you say negative things though
thankyou kindly everyone. i can see why you think this is immature, i know its a stupid, babyish poem. i usually write very emotional things, with very complicaterd characters and nukbers of riddlesa, but this is the first time i ave written an animal one, and so it won't be my best.
Creature, creature, oh dog so sly-
Who lives beneath the dampest earth.
O feral thing who's pleasure be wry,
She bathes beneath the dawn's new birth.
Her paws so light- and nimble, too,
The reddened fur that weaves in grass.
On her intimates ear she will softly chew,
Yawn and squint the eyes of brass.
Something within the reach of her eye,
With risen ears of a wary hunt.
The vixen creeps upon the one she will spy,
As her waiting mate rumbles a deepened grunt.
The pointed tail will follow her limbs,
That sweep across the heather land.
Through dagger teeth, the feeding hymns,
To pierce rabbit's flesh of her hunt not planned.
Creature, creature, oh dog so sly-
Who prowls between the shaded place.
O slender thing with sense so shy,
She dashes beyond the forgotten race.
ok sorry if i didn't make it clear enough...
could you read it and tell me whta you think of it?
i don't mind if you say negative things though
thankyou kindly everyone. i can see why you think this is immature, i know its a stupid, babyish poem. i usually write very emotional things, with very complicaterd characters and nukbers of riddlesa, but this is the first time i ave written an animal one, and so it won't be my best.