This is my blurb for my new story could you read it & criticize???
Nella is a M'ored, an elemental, swift, and breathtakingly beautiful killing machine. Her daily life consists of hunting down and killing the scum that call themselves "immortals". She used to do it just for fun and school, but now...
...now she has a better reason.
Have you ever felt like someone was watching you?
She knows who it was.
Has a chill ever ran down your spine?
She knows why.
Have you ever been afraid?
You should be.
So help, and CRITICISM!!!
Nella is a M'ored, an elemental, swift, and breathtakingly beautiful killing machine. Her daily life consists of hunting down and killing the scum that call themselves "immortals". She used to do it just for fun and school, but now...
...now she has a better reason.
Have you ever felt like someone was watching you?
She knows who it was.
Has a chill ever ran down your spine?
She knows why.
Have you ever been afraid?
You should be.
So help, and CRITICISM!!!