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<blockquote data-quote="one" data-source="post: 2193084" data-attributes="member: 212587">Can you tell me if this sounds good, or if there is grammatical errors... or if it doesnt flow. please help!A man sat hunched over on a park bench beside a bubbling fountain, his eyes focused on a document which sat on his lap. The man read over the document in a precise fashion, but his mind was elsewhere. He paused for a moment, twirling his pen in his right hand thoughtfully as he reminisced back to a time where he was happy and carefree.&nbsp; Tom’s college days had been a good time in his life, a time in which he had met his fiancée Amanda. He had met her in his second year of college, and still today he could remember her dark brown hair and piercing light green eyes. They had been together throughout college, but unfortunately in their fourth and final year, Amanda was offered a prestigious job in Australia. She accepted the job, and Tom lost contact with her. Tom remained in New York since his fiancé left, and although he has a reasonable marketing job, he is stressed and lonely since she left, barely making rent every month, and losing sleep. Amanda`s departure somewhat shaped the person that Tom had become. He could still remember her as if it was yesterday.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="one, post: 2193084, member: 212587"] Can you tell me if this sounds good, or if there is grammatical errors... or if it doesnt flow. please help! A man sat hunched over on a park bench beside a bubbling fountain, his eyes focused on a document which sat on his lap. The man read over the document in a precise fashion, but his mind was elsewhere. He paused for a moment, twirling his pen in his right hand thoughtfully as he reminisced back to a time where he was happy and carefree. Tom’s college days had been a good time in his life, a time in which he had met his fiancée Amanda. He had met her in his second year of college, and still today he could remember her dark brown hair and piercing light green eyes. They had been together throughout college, but unfortunately in their fourth and final year, Amanda was offered a prestigious job in Australia. She accepted the job, and Tom lost contact with her. Tom remained in New York since his fiancé left, and although he has a reasonable marketing job, he is stressed and lonely since she left, barely making rent every month, and losing sleep. Amanda`s departure somewhat shaped the person that Tom had become. He could still remember her as if it was yesterday. [/QUOTE]

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