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<blockquote data-quote="Christopher" data-source="post: 2194110" data-attributes="member: 239349">Got some lyrics here... tell me what you thinkI sit down, Look around, grab the pen and padOpen up my mind to the Thoughts, both the Good and the BadThe ones I&#039;ve got of my mom, the ones I&#039;ve got of my dadThe ones of my past that make a grown man weary and sadEverything that I&#039;ve had, I sit and I think, and upon them I dwellWhat have I done? What have I said? Am I going to Hell?I can&#039;t deal, my mind perverted and twisted up like a Tornado dealt with the steelIt&#039;s got me feeling surreal, I mean it&#039;s feeling so realWhy is it all of my checks say &quot;Good Luck, it&#039;s yo Deal!&quot;I know, it&#039;s cause they fixin to Bounce Faster than yo dealer when the cop found his ounce......All I got right now... I just wrote this on the spot after I clicked &quot;Ask a Question&quot; BTW lol, what do y&#039;all think???and if you don&#039;t like it, please don&#039;t trash it and all... just constructive criticism please...Thanks Latj, yeah you rated my Verse a few months ago, when I first came back to the RHH section... and yeah, I understand what you&#039;re saying about the last verse... I was getting it together pretty well, and then lost my train of though and just rhymed it lol</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Christopher, post: 2194110, member: 239349"] Got some lyrics here... tell me what you think I sit down, Look around, grab the pen and pad Open up my mind to the Thoughts, both the Good and the Bad The ones I've got of my mom, the ones I've got of my dad The ones of my past that make a grown man weary and sad Everything that I've had, I sit and I think, and upon them I dwell What have I done? What have I said? Am I going to Hell? I can't deal, my mind perverted and twisted up like a Tornado dealt with the steel It's got me feeling surreal, I mean it's feeling so real Why is it all of my checks say "Good Luck, it's yo Deal!" I know, it's cause they fixin to Bounce Faster than yo dealer when the cop found his ounce ...... All I got right now... I just wrote this on the spot after I clicked "Ask a Question" BTW lol, what do y'all think??? and if you don't like it, please don't trash it and all... just constructive criticism please... Thanks Latj, yeah you rated my Verse a few months ago, when I first came back to the RHH section... and yeah, I understand what you're saying about the last verse... I was getting it together pretty well, and then lost my train of though and just rhymed it lol [/QUOTE]

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