The wind hissed through the air as I stared blankly at Dante’s motionless body lying limp and lifeless on the floor. He looked almost statuesque; his soft, creamy skin resembling that of a limestone sculpture.
A single tear trickled down my cheek and froze against my icy cold cheek; my creator, my friend and my true love had gone. He had been taken from me in a cruel, twisted and pointless battle.
I brushed the frozen tear away with the back of my hand as an irrepressible rage grumbled deep inside of me.
Dante’s death would not be in vain, for I would not let it be.
I understand that it won't make much sense as you do not know much about the plot but opinions would be appreciated.
Thank You
A single tear trickled down my cheek and froze against my icy cold cheek - This line SHOULD say -
A single tear trickled down my cheek and froze against my icy cold SKIN.
A single tear trickled down my cheek and froze against my icy cold cheek; my creator, my friend and my true love had gone. He had been taken from me in a cruel, twisted and pointless battle.
I brushed the frozen tear away with the back of my hand as an irrepressible rage grumbled deep inside of me.
Dante’s death would not be in vain, for I would not let it be.
I understand that it won't make much sense as you do not know much about the plot but opinions would be appreciated.
Thank You
A single tear trickled down my cheek and froze against my icy cold cheek - This line SHOULD say -
A single tear trickled down my cheek and froze against my icy cold SKIN.