Songwriting feedback/tips?

[adam]

Verse 1

I woke inside my own head
Just to find that my peace had bled
The roots in here are filled with doubt
Telling me what ill live without
Ill live without knowing you
All I sought is the truth
Was this life meant to stay
Or fade away like yesterdays

Pre chorus

Cuz nothings the same
Since you've burned me down
Left me in the ground

So wont you go
And stay away
there's so much I have got to say
And I've been told
That the pain makes you grow
So now ill leave
this memory
Ill just release

Verse 2

A room filled with emptiness
Saw the scene of a life so bliss
Now its all been washed away
Washed away by my dying days
Cuz dying days have haunted me
You are the ghost that will not fade
Now the more I live the more feel
All of the lies that are so real

Pre-chorus

Chorus

Bridge

The dis-contempt pours as rain
But we mus'nt forget it washes away
And if the army of fear
Marches here
We'll turn our backs
And never look back

Final chorus

So now you'll
And stay away
there's so much I have got to say
And I've been told
That the pain makes you grow
So now I left
With no regrets
My memory.

End.

(Yeah it's a breakup song =/ )

 

[ChrisMoore]

If you are looking for an answer, I can tell you I have no information as to what you may find useful. But what I do have are a very particular set of skills; skills I have acquired over a very long career. Skills that make me the best friend you've got. If you listen carefully, and take what I'm telling you seriously, that'll be the end of it. But if you do not, then I will forget about this particular encounter, and I will not help you.