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<blockquote data-quote="Frog" data-source="post: 2638983" data-attributes="member: 150885">&#039;Society as a whole naturally constructs a border of confinement to stifle the intrinsic desires present in humankind. In other words, in any civilization there are norms that the average individual abides by; the goodness or badness of a human is determined through his or her ability to conform to these very norms.&#039;The use of &#039;in other words&#039; indicates that you didn&#039;t get it right in the first sentence and that it needed clarification.I would suggest you re-organise it a bit -In any civilization there are NORMALLY ACCEPTED RULES that the average individual abides by AND the &#039;goodness&#039; or &#039;badness&#039; of a human is determined BY his or her ability to conform to these norms. Society naturally constructs BORDERS of confinement to stifle the intrinsic desires present in humankind TO..........You should now give a brief list (three or four should be enough to give a &#039;flavour&#039;) of what it is that the &#039;borders&#039; are meant to repress by confining.</blockquote>

[QUOTE="Frog, post: 2638983, member: 150885"] 'Society as a whole naturally constructs a border of confinement to stifle the intrinsic desires present in humankind. In other words, in any civilization there are norms that the average individual abides by; the goodness or badness of a human is determined through his or her ability to conform to these very norms.' The use of 'in other words' indicates that you didn't get it right in the first sentence and that it needed clarification. I would suggest you re-organise it a bit - In any civilization there are NORMALLY ACCEPTED RULES that the average individual abides by AND the 'goodness' or 'badness' of a human is determined BY his or her ability to conform to these norms. Society naturally constructs BORDERS of confinement to stifle the intrinsic desires present in humankind TO.......... You should now give a brief list (three or four should be enough to give a 'flavour') of what it is that the 'borders' are meant to repress by confining. [/QUOTE]

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