EchoWinter
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- Jul 29, 2010
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Erin sat and stared at the boy who was being convicted; life imprisonment. He had lost his chance of a life for one mistake; taking her mums. Beside her Lacey sat crying, her hands covering her face and Chance’s arm round her shoulder. Erin sat motionless watching the boy, Logan she was sure that’s what his name was; silent tears were streaming down his face. She couldn’t help feeling sorry for him.
Logan, Jayden and Liam had been at a house party. Logan had been driving, he was drunk they all were, way over the limit, but that didn’t stop him deciding it would be okay for him to drive home. It had been a good idea at the time but now if he could have took that day back he would have.
It was quite late about 2 in the morning when they left the party. They had been driving along the almost empty streets of Miami when the accident happened Christina had been on her way home from a friends leaving party. She had been stopped at the Stop sign, Liam had been passing round more beers and Logan had turned round to take the beer but lost control of the car and crashed into Christina she had died instantly Liam died in hospital and few hours later.
Erin felt pity at the boy who stood facing life in jail, he had hopes and dreams, aspirations and all of that had went up in a puff of smoke the minute he opened the car door at the party. Now he would spend the rest of his life in jail, with no chance of parole he had lost everything. Erin looked to the left of her, she could see his family silently weeping for the son that at the age of 17 was spending the rest of his life in jail. Jayden the other only other survive of the crash was sitting silently beside them, still cut and bruised from the accident with a plaster cast around his right arm. He had suffered the most, his best friend had died and his other best friend was being conviced of double homicide.
What do you think?
Any suggestions to make it better?
Logan, Jayden and Liam had been at a house party. Logan had been driving, he was drunk they all were, way over the limit, but that didn’t stop him deciding it would be okay for him to drive home. It had been a good idea at the time but now if he could have took that day back he would have.
It was quite late about 2 in the morning when they left the party. They had been driving along the almost empty streets of Miami when the accident happened Christina had been on her way home from a friends leaving party. She had been stopped at the Stop sign, Liam had been passing round more beers and Logan had turned round to take the beer but lost control of the car and crashed into Christina she had died instantly Liam died in hospital and few hours later.
Erin felt pity at the boy who stood facing life in jail, he had hopes and dreams, aspirations and all of that had went up in a puff of smoke the minute he opened the car door at the party. Now he would spend the rest of his life in jail, with no chance of parole he had lost everything. Erin looked to the left of her, she could see his family silently weeping for the son that at the age of 17 was spending the rest of his life in jail. Jayden the other only other survive of the crash was sitting silently beside them, still cut and bruised from the accident with a plaster cast around his right arm. He had suffered the most, his best friend had died and his other best friend was being conviced of double homicide.
What do you think?
Any suggestions to make it better?