What do you think of the introduction paragraphs ?

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There are so ways people express the ways they have had to deal with poverty in society. Also they are endless songs , movies and books expressing about people who have money that take advantage of those who do not. The Horatio Alger book called Ragged Dick and The Pearl also Mice and Men written by John Steinbeck all deal with the many aspects of inhumanity ,greed and the American Dream where its believed through hard work , strong ethics , and being respectful a person can achieve a better life for themselves. I believe both of these aspects to be true to those who are in poverty.
“Ragged Dick” and “The Pearl and Mice and Men" , both are about poverty but they have very different outcomes when characters try to overcome their misfortune. In both Horatio Alger book and John Steinbeck the main characters are impoverished. In ‘’ Ragged Dick”, Alger writes about a little boy living on the streets of New York City. The little boy names Ragged Dick and, quite often reference as the “Hero” , is living and sleeping in the streets while earning wages by boot shining and selling news papers. He lives alone without parents or any guardians looking after him .Though through his misfortune has comes in contact with a bit of luck when he meets a wealthy man and his son from the country. John Steinbeck main characters in both of his books are in penniless positions but the outcomes are the complete opposite from what happens to Ragged Dick. In the Mice and Men there is two men , who are ranch workers ,who are running away from the law in the beginning of the book .On their way to an another job , hoping the job when help them recognized their dreams , bad luck follows them. Right at the beginning of the book, the bus driver’s intentional lies to them about how far they are to the ranch they’re about to work on. The John Steinbeck book’s continues on with misfortune as the same with “The Pearl”. In the Ragged Dick Horatio teaches the morals of the American Dream , that every boy can go from rags to riches if he works hard , honest , has good manners and is a respectable person. Both extremes that are taught either in Horatio and Steinbeck are true to life you can turn your life around if you work hard and have decent manners but the world is also a evil place where sometimes dreams do not come true.
 
It's not that horrid. I believe that you use too many "the"'s and too many resource backups, unless you really need them, I suggest you take them out, at least one to make the paragraphs flow. Your transition is also a bit unflowing. It sort of jumps from one part of the spectrum to another, so maybe you could use your experiences or quotes to make them sound more reasonable, depending on what type of essay you are writing.

Good Luck! It does have a nice ring to it.
 
It's not that horrid. I believe that you use too many "the"'s and too many resource backups, unless you really need them, I suggest you take them out, at least one to make the paragraphs flow. Your transition is also a bit unflowing. It sort of jumps from one part of the spectrum to another, so maybe you could use your experiences or quotes to make them sound more reasonable, depending on what type of essay you are writing.

Good Luck! It does have a nice ring to it.
 
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