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<blockquote data-quote="JonT" data-source="post: 2035198" data-attributes="member: 257678"><p>The Journey To Get A New Pint Of Milk</p><p></p><p>It sounded like something swinging from a piece of rope. Dr. Thornton walked into the room and saw one of his mates from school called Harry. He was dangling from a piece of rope. Dr. Thornton asked him how did he get like that, Harry said Mr. Westcott done it. That was true. Mr. Westcott shot the rope and Harry fell down. Harry joined the crew. They arrived at the lab and Dr. Thornton tested it, he stood back in horror.</p><p></p><p>Back at the park, everyone was worrying because the men had been gone for a few hours now. One man, named James, secretly went to the shop, he wanted to find the CCTV tape so he could see what happened. He walked quietly into the shop, trying not to attract attention in case the beasts were still in there. He found the tape and then ran to his house and played the tape. What he saw was so horrific it was like all of the best special effect guys from all around the world all worked together to produce this footage. Coming back to reality, James walked back to the park and told everyone about the tape. They were even more scared now.</p><p></p><p>Dr. Thornton stood back in horror, the blood was not real. It was raspberry juice. How could he have made this mistake. Maybe it was all the stress he was under at work. He told the men. They all agreed to tell everyone that they couldn't find any blood. They were just about to exit the hospital when they heard another sound. This wasn't like the rest. It was some sort of growl, Dr. Thornton ran to the room where they found David. David was no more, the creatures were in the building. The men heard noises coming from the air vents. They ran outside not knowing what to do except to run. They ran and ran until they got to the park. A woman asked them why were they so long, Mr. Owen replied, telling her that they couldn't find any traces of blood, so they went to the hospital to search for any survivors, he said they found Harry. Everyone became silent, looking up into the trees. They heard some sort of animal lurking in the thick branches and leaves. There was some rustling then in less than a second leaped out of the tree, it as a squirrel. Everyone started to go crazy now, people were fed up of standing outside, knowing that they could die any second. </p><p></p><p>Dr. Thornton said to go to the oil refinery where he thought was a safe place. So off they went walking through the streets with the refinery in everyones view. The second before last person at the back of everyone was talking to his mate after 5 minutes, he had no reply, he turned around and saw nothing, except houses. Now he got really scared, he kept what he new to himself not to make everyone even more scared. By now is was crying, he continued walking, then felt his body jerk in an upwards motion, his neck broke and he died instantly.</p><p></p><p>A kid in front of him heard a noise, he turned around and saw the once alive man hanging from a lamp post, he tugged his mothers arm and pointed at the sight. She screamed and started panic. A few people asked her what was wrong, she pointed. Now everyone saw the man hanging from the tree and they started sprinting to the oil refinery.</p><p></p><p></p><p>thanks for reading, stay in touch for part 3</p></blockquote><p></p>
[QUOTE="JonT, post: 2035198, member: 257678"] The Journey To Get A New Pint Of Milk It sounded like something swinging from a piece of rope. Dr. Thornton walked into the room and saw one of his mates from school called Harry. He was dangling from a piece of rope. Dr. Thornton asked him how did he get like that, Harry said Mr. Westcott done it. That was true. Mr. Westcott shot the rope and Harry fell down. Harry joined the crew. They arrived at the lab and Dr. Thornton tested it, he stood back in horror. Back at the park, everyone was worrying because the men had been gone for a few hours now. One man, named James, secretly went to the shop, he wanted to find the CCTV tape so he could see what happened. He walked quietly into the shop, trying not to attract attention in case the beasts were still in there. He found the tape and then ran to his house and played the tape. What he saw was so horrific it was like all of the best special effect guys from all around the world all worked together to produce this footage. Coming back to reality, James walked back to the park and told everyone about the tape. They were even more scared now. Dr. Thornton stood back in horror, the blood was not real. It was raspberry juice. How could he have made this mistake. Maybe it was all the stress he was under at work. He told the men. They all agreed to tell everyone that they couldn't find any blood. They were just about to exit the hospital when they heard another sound. This wasn't like the rest. It was some sort of growl, Dr. Thornton ran to the room where they found David. David was no more, the creatures were in the building. The men heard noises coming from the air vents. They ran outside not knowing what to do except to run. They ran and ran until they got to the park. A woman asked them why were they so long, Mr. Owen replied, telling her that they couldn't find any traces of blood, so they went to the hospital to search for any survivors, he said they found Harry. Everyone became silent, looking up into the trees. They heard some sort of animal lurking in the thick branches and leaves. There was some rustling then in less than a second leaped out of the tree, it as a squirrel. Everyone started to go crazy now, people were fed up of standing outside, knowing that they could die any second. Dr. Thornton said to go to the oil refinery where he thought was a safe place. So off they went walking through the streets with the refinery in everyones view. The second before last person at the back of everyone was talking to his mate after 5 minutes, he had no reply, he turned around and saw nothing, except houses. Now he got really scared, he kept what he new to himself not to make everyone even more scared. By now is was crying, he continued walking, then felt his body jerk in an upwards motion, his neck broke and he died instantly. A kid in front of him heard a noise, he turned around and saw the once alive man hanging from a lamp post, he tugged his mothers arm and pointed at the sight. She screamed and started panic. A few people asked her what was wrong, she pointed. Now everyone saw the man hanging from the tree and they started sprinting to the oil refinery. thanks for reading, stay in touch for part 3 [/QUOTE]
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