Take_five01
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...sentence of my introduction.? I showed it two times to my professor and he doesn't like my thesis statement which is last sentence of my introduction. If you know what do I need to edit or change, or any suggestions. Perhaps, it's not understandable or unclear. Thank you.
In the world, as technology rises upwards, people begin to adapt to it quickly, but they don’t know to what consequences it can wrapped toward them. One of the important issues which are facing people is communication by the internet. It’s beginning to be a problem because people are trying to find varieties of ways to communicate with each other online. Nowadays, there are a lot of technologies which they can use in order to communicate. However, technology tools could affect people negatively, such as cell phones because it distracts people when they either study or work, Sony PSP because it allows getting an access to the internet and one of the tools that replaces a real communication of people, and laptops because people begin to spend too much time on it which makes them forget about a work that they have to do. They’re communicating many times and hours a day and so it’s a concern to people because they’re becoming addicted to it; thus, the addiction plays a big role for people, especially for boys and girls because they use internet as often as being involved on it, and most of them have a hard time to stop communicate with their friends, or just with people from a particular tool he or she employs.
In the world, as technology rises upwards, people begin to adapt to it quickly, but they don’t know to what consequences it can wrapped toward them. One of the important issues which are facing people is communication by the internet. It’s beginning to be a problem because people are trying to find varieties of ways to communicate with each other online. Nowadays, there are a lot of technologies which they can use in order to communicate. However, technology tools could affect people negatively, such as cell phones because it distracts people when they either study or work, Sony PSP because it allows getting an access to the internet and one of the tools that replaces a real communication of people, and laptops because people begin to spend too much time on it which makes them forget about a work that they have to do. They’re communicating many times and hours a day and so it’s a concern to people because they’re becoming addicted to it; thus, the addiction plays a big role for people, especially for boys and girls because they use internet as often as being involved on it, and most of them have a hard time to stop communicate with their friends, or just with people from a particular tool he or she employs.