Would this catch your eye?!?

Julie

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If you hate the supernatural(i.e: vampires, werewolves, or hybrids of both)then go no further.
I don't want stupid comments or mean ones.
I've posted this synopsis before and I'm posting it again.
If you were browsing books- just by looking at the back or the inside page-would you want to read this one?
In a way, I like the way I wrote it-kind of like a brochure. I though that was cute.
But, in another way, I think that it should be a bit more catchy.
Tell me what you think.
Don't be mean. I don't like mean comments. I want constructive criticism. Honest opinions.
But, be gentle with me. I find it heard to deal with when people tell me that they think my writing is stupid or that I should stop-I wont.
Welcome to Russia! Here, you'll find some of the most beautiful sights in the world.
Among The Kremlin, St. Basil's Cathedral, and Red Square, stands one of the most prestigious schools in the country. We regret to inform you, but we have a No-Human policy. Our students tend to like blood directly from the vein. We wouldn't want an "unfortunate incident" to arise.
We teach our students discipline. We teach them about our history. We hone their skills to perfection. We train Deathbringers and any other able body for their future to serve in our Guard.
Though things may sound pleasant at St. Lucian, something very dark and very powerful is waiting to be unleashed from it's hellish prison. It's coming to claim its heir to the dark throne.
Enter Evangeline Sarkovsky. She's smart, tough, and made of steel. She's been plagued with night terrors since she was four-years-old, when her father left her. In all of her dreams she was saved from her dark fate. She's never met this dream-savior, but she knows that he's out there. It only takes switching schools and countries to find him.
 
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