I've heard "Good morning" over the phone at 11:59 at night. "Salutations" is a good words; perhaps use a synonym for "friends".
BQ1: It (thankfully) bears little semblance to my life.
BQ2: I've made a lot of good friends, especially here in B&A.
The introduction is simply impossible to get past. What kind of person, real or fictional, introduces themselves along with their height? It just goes on and on without really any point.
Swear loudly, then continue. I rarely watch movies, and I haven't been reading as much since I've started writing, but even if I see an idea similar to mine, I keep going, telling myself "great minds think alike". Unless it's identical (which would be a huge coincidence), at which point I...
A lot of villains are self-elite, moody jerks. I'm not saying your villain is no good, but I am a firm believer in "show, don't tell" when it comes to character descriptions. In other words, his character can't be judged by a biography but rather his actions. Focus on his acts rather than a...