I would love some feedback on the opening for a story... It's meant to be a thriller about a family that seems perfect on the outside but on the inside has a horrible web of dirty secrets...
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I suppose I...
It's a beautiful day!
Don't let it get away…
Music slithered out of the radio harmonising with the drumming rhythm of car wheels eating up the Pacific Highway. The shy trees, shrubs and fields only peeked out at the cars two occupants for short moments before whipping back into the distance...
I am applying for an exchange program to Japan. There is no language requirement to get in and initially they requested my letter in English, but then, about a week ago they asked if I could please translate my letter. I really am not that good at Japanese but I did my best to rewrite it. I was...
I'm kind of an amateur at this, but I've entered a 30 second piece into a contest, please check it out and give me feedback, and please vote for it through facebook if you like it! :)
http://apps.facebook.com/ecosgetwashed/contests/191708/voteable_entries/50648513
thanks!
Please don't troll.
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This is us today...we have finally gotten the distance issue corrected (turns out it was entirely my bad...I just needed to sit deep in the saddle instead of overly anticipating the jump.)
To me, it looks like I have to get over...
i already asked this today, but i would like more critique on my writing (good or bad, i dont care. just be honest and helpful). For some background info, it takes place in an apocalyptic future, where the climate's gone crazy.
The World’s Too Damn Cold
I walk out of my aged New York apartment...
I have to watch a movie and critique the science in it, but I hate alien/outerspace sci-fi movies, so I need a movie that has science in it (cloning someone, for example) but also has a story line that isn't like Star Trek or anything like that. One example I was thinking of doing was Weird...
This is not the beginning, nor the end. Somewhere in the middle. Is it good enough?
"My heart pounded quite hard in my chest as I gazed at the entrance. Violent screams and images spun rapidly in my head. For some reason, I was always nervous or simply overly excited before the hunt.
I stepped...
Holly
I screamed as my skin started to turn to black fur. It pained me to look at Ashlee as tears poured down her hollow cheeks. It was her first change. "Shh... it's okay Ash." The pain surged through my veins as my arms grew black fur thicker.
Ash looked at me pain just reflecting in her bare...
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TORONTO — During the Stanley Cup Final against the Boston Bruins, Roberto Luongo made two statements about Tim Thomas that, in hindsight, will go down in hockey infamy.
The first was a comment about Thomas's goaltending style after Max Lapierre's game-winning goal in Game 5: "It's an...
The main protagonist is having a flash back of a woman that he used to love...it's not finished yet, but I just wanted to see what you guys thought about it.
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Italics - I loved that woman, Beatrice Strauss, but I also had a deep...
I'm 13 and I haven't written in a months time so I'm still rusty. I just need your opinions if I still have the writing in me.
Rachel gripped her pillow, her breaths a rasp as she rolled herself in her sheets like thread around a spool. He's not here anymore remember, she thought to herself...
Hello!
Ok, so here's a scene in my story that I would LOVE some critique on. It's a fairly big scene but I'm scared it doesn't come across all that great. I haven't written in a while because I'd had other stuff to do so yeah.
Critique please?
Oh and Ryan IS A GIRL!
The heat from the...
I am writing a book about a caretaker on a job who is terrorized by unknown assailants at a house where she's watching an elderly woman. I know I posted it, but this time I want revisions!
Chapter 4- We don’t bite
“Oh Rick, stop it!” giggled Portia. Portia and Rick sat in the backseat of...
END IN THE ANSWER :)? I can't believe I'm doing this. Is all I could think as I walked into the building. The air was frigid and windy, my nose and ears were freezing and red. I thought as I saw myself in a window reflection. I always seem to see myself in the reflection of windows and stop and...
Staring blankly ahead, I attempted to keep my composure when I heard a knock at my door. Dad was here – he had to be. No doubt the cops had called him by now and told him what I’ve done. Usually the consequences for things like this seemed brutally severe when first delivered, but in a few...
Something from a few years back. I'm not going to go into plot details or anything. I'm just curious how the writing sounds. Here it goes:
The air was fat with summer, and the morning was near gone. Jacob woke to his stomach: it demanded immediate attention. He squinted into the world...
Something from a few years back. I'm not going to go into plot details or anything. I'm just curious how the writing sounds. Here it goes:
The air was fat with summer, and the morning was near gone. Jacob woke to his stomach: it demanded immediate attention. He squinted into the world...