excerpt

  1. B

    WDYT of this excerpt?

    After an hour or so, the sound of a kerfuffle made him glance out the window at the docks. A gaggle of Faridale men had gathered around a large raised platform. In the corner of was a large table manned by a two tall men, one in red and one in black. Declan watched as, one by one, the Faridale...
  2. R

    What are your thoughts on this excerpt from my short humor/depression personal

    narrative? Thoughts in Depression It’s been partially less than a week, possibly 3 or 4 days or so, since the announcement was made, and I find it to be more and more difficult to sleep at night. It’s odd, but I can’t help but to have the uneasy gut-feeling that 3 men are preparing, at 3 in the...
    • RaymondKe
    • Thread
    • excerpt humor or depression personal short thoughts
    • Replies: 0
    • Forum: Humor & Jokes
  3. A

    Wild Excerpt: The Beginnings Of A 1,100-Mile Hike

    Cheryl Strayed hiked about 1,100 miles on the Pacific Crest Trail alone when she was just 26. We interviewed her about how the experience helped her cope with her mother's early death, but her new memoir, Wild: From Lost to Found on the Pacific Crest Trail, puts into words an almost unimaginable...
  4. K

    Which excerpt do you like better , first person pov or third person pov? Also

    tips to make my writing bettter? Both are pretty easy to me, i am just not sure which one would be more interesting way to write/better for the read. . Also can you give me any advice/tips to improve my writing. I am only 15 though so i am not perfect. Thanks in advanced :) Third Wiley gripped...
  5. M

    What do you think of an excerpt from my new chapter?

    It was late in the afternoon. Carter and a couple of his friends stood on the trail of Algonquin Park. Oliver Kessler sat on the edge of the road lighting up a joint. Carter couldn't stop thinking about how stupid his friends were. They thought they were invincible at the rate of risks they...
  6. K

    Excerpt from a story I'm writing?

    Sorry about any spelling mistakes :) Chief Mage Venryll strode along the crowded halls. A sneer came to his face naturally as he stared at the tired faces. He kept his robes well away from them. Who knew what they carried. Nothing he wanted, at any rate. But there was an irritating voice at the...
  7. D

    Do you like this excerpt of my story?

    Andrew's mouth opened in a mute scream and his legs seized up in shock, sending him crashing to his knees. Two inches from his face a pair of eyes shone out from the steamy darkness, the irises such a deep shade of brown that the eyes appeared to be merely large black pupils fringed by a tangle...
  8. M

    B&A: Looking for some constructive feedback on this story excerpt?

    I posted this a couple days ago but I'm reposting (sorry) because I want some different oppinions and especially some constructive criticism. The main character, Zira, has just woken up from a severe head injury and a gunshot wound to the leg. She doesn't remember anything and has no idea where...
  9. D

    WHAT DO YOU THINK OF MY STORY? Excerpt?

    But then Rudolph was stepping away, the Traitor garb he had not worn for almost a year clutched in his pale hands. "You, too, will be a much sought-after prize. I, at least, have this to buy me time," he told her. "No displays of foolishness, Selena," he commanded in a strong voice. Then, in a...
  10. N

    Critique this excerpt for me please?

    There's something really off about this, I think it's because I'm not in the mood that I'm writing so crappily, but I have to be in the mood! So can you help me out here? This is the first part. A white frost blew through his heart and whistled like wind in the hollows of his bones. The...
  11. H

    Please read this excerpt and tell me what you think!?

    Sam rubbed his eyes and sighed, “Nothing that made any sense, just uh… that he would call us every day to let us know what was happening.” “Happening?” “Yeah, I didn’t know either.” Sam stood up off of the bed put his hand out. I thought he wanted the note back, but he knocked it out of my...
  12. Y

    Could someone critique an excerpt of my essay on Othello?

    The deaths in Othello are varied and especially meaningful in context. Death is never simply motiveless, like Iago’s malevolent deeds, but rather, it represents the “flaws” in the characters and affirms the necessity of their deaths. In some cases, the character’s life has already become so...
  13. B

    Novel excerpt for your review... (I know there are a ton of these here but could

    you humor me please)? This is a small portion of a novel I'm writing. I'd appreciate any input you'd like to offer. Thanks. Mary felt rather anxious. How long would they have to sit here in the dark before their carriage arrived? What if whoever it was had forgotten about picking them up in the...
  14. J

    How is this excerpt of my first chapter?

    I looked over the top of the book I held in my hand to see those eyes and that familiar mesmerizing smile string at me. I turned down my radio, which was blasting Secondhand Serenade's Fall for you, and lifted one eyebrow in questioning. "Mom wants you to set the table. I'm having someone over...
  15. C

    Please read an excerpt from my vampire/ sci fi type story?

    Please let me know what you think. Do you want to know more?Who is your fave character? What is your age group? Thanks! I never met my mother. She perished in an accident along with my sister, Alexa. My father told me he would explain it to me "When the time is right". She and my sister had...
  16. I

    Interesting? Not Interesting? Excerpt?

    Title: Bartholomew's Guild ***Kelsie has just touched the scroll of destiny. She has a very vivid vision which she suspects has something to do with her future. Mr. Wolff is pleased to see this happen, pleased because he now knows that she has the same power as Bartimus Bartholomew, the founder...
  17. T

    Excerpt from a sci-fi novel, please give feedback?

    Maggie followed her parents who seemed all too delighted to leave the doctor’s office. After they left the glass double doors at the front of the building, the three of them were greeted by a crisp breeze that rattled the yellow, orange, and brown leaves hanging by threads from the branches...
  18. G

    Darwin's Universe: Evolution from A to Z (a free excerpt)

    ... from the National Center for Science Education. Click the picture to get the PDF of Darwin's Universe: Evolution from A to Z . Read the comments on this post... More...
    • Geek
    • Thread
    • darwin evolution excerpt free universe
    • Replies: 0
    • Forum: Science News
  19. M

    What do you think of this excerpt from my book?

    It's a young adult fantasy. What do you think? Does it flow nice, etc. Please tell me what you like and don't like about it (: --- The night air was crisp and cold. A light breeze whipped around Damon’s head as he stood impatiently on the watch tower of Castle Loch. He was waiting for...
  20. M

    excerpt short story? help?

    initial response? The old man’s stick followed his gaze as it moved down each row of earth, taking stock. The chives were looking well. Healthy, happy and watered. It was hot. The old man had a mug in his lap. The edges burrowed past his trousers, into the flesh of his legs. The chair he sat in...
Top