Any advice or impressions about my writing?

cier

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http://Sphinx-of-Akhenaten.deviantart.com/art/Theo-s-Past-Draft-136733349

It's a rather long blurb, but any critique on it? Other than things that'll be caught when I go through and Edit it for a second draft?

And not just stylistically, but the subject matter too.
 
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