Can you review the first paragraph of my novel?

Ihatemynameyo

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Here we go:
Mrs. B was lovely. There was no other way to describe her. She is much loved as a teacher, and much desired by the male teachers. There was one in particular; a man named Mr. F. Mr. F was odd. There was also no other way to describe him. He was distinctly…different… He wandered alone in the halls during class. Then came the fateful day that he decided Mrs. B was his “soul mate”, as he would say. It all happened during 6th period, on an average day in October. It was a Wednesday; a completely unremarkable day. Wednesdays will never be the same for me ever again…
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Thanks! :) Please be constructive, not destructive!
This will be a teen-ish novel, written by a teen :) Hope you like!
 
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