Comments/Critique on my prologue?

[Ashley]

It's on Wattpad - if you already have an account please comment on it on Wattpad, if not just give me an answer down in the answers bit! Thank you!

http://www.wattpad.com/12029624-camp-403

 

[hally]

Well Done. it was great

 

[SIntesJackson]

I think we've got the next Ian Flemming out here.
Spy/Action/Thriller books would be your world!

 

[smouty]

Hey, for someone of 14 that's pretty damn good, you will no doubt get critisism from some people, just take it constructively and do what you well.. which is write