I had to write an essay on if curling should be considered an olympic sport. Can anyone out there please review and critique it. And help me on one if mine is extremely bad?
Here's my intro:
The crowds are cheering, the people are shouting, excitement is in the air. Then there is silence; the heavy granite ball is tossed. The players begin sweeping the ice around the ball vigorously. Their hearts are pounding. Sweat is pouring down their faces. It is the make it or break it game; if they win they become successful and rich. If they lose everything that they worked up to till this moment has been wasted. This is the sport of curling. You don’t need to have a lot of endurance like in swimming or tremendous strength like in wrestling. But you do need a lot of cooperation and teamwork to win this game. And unlike many sports you need strategy. Curling is one of the few sports where athletes actually need to be clever and strategic not extremely muscular or have a good endurance. Just because it looks easy doesn’t mean that it actually is. Curling should be an Olympic sport because it’s requires skill, it’s a great international sport, and anyone can do it.
Here's my intro:
The crowds are cheering, the people are shouting, excitement is in the air. Then there is silence; the heavy granite ball is tossed. The players begin sweeping the ice around the ball vigorously. Their hearts are pounding. Sweat is pouring down their faces. It is the make it or break it game; if they win they become successful and rich. If they lose everything that they worked up to till this moment has been wasted. This is the sport of curling. You don’t need to have a lot of endurance like in swimming or tremendous strength like in wrestling. But you do need a lot of cooperation and teamwork to win this game. And unlike many sports you need strategy. Curling is one of the few sports where athletes actually need to be clever and strategic not extremely muscular or have a good endurance. Just because it looks easy doesn’t mean that it actually is. Curling should be an Olympic sport because it’s requires skill, it’s a great international sport, and anyone can do it.