Do you like my first 2 chapters?

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BrittneyeMeKabasta

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I am A teen Who needs help how do you like my firs 2 chapters? here is he link


http://www.worthyofpublishing.com/book.asp?book_ID=4200
 
I liked it it. It was fairly fast paced and exciting for the start the book. I think the Second chapter was a little boring but its still pretty good over all.
 
Frankly, I didn't really like it. For some reason, even though you jumped right into the action, I wasn't really hooked. It seemed to drag on a bit.

And it isn't very realistic. I quote:

"I'm seventeen, and I've been a vampire for about four hundred years."
"Seriously?" I was amazed.

They've only just met, and he's telling her that he's a vampire. And she's amazed, not terrified. It's really not very realistic.
 
fast paced,and good work,but need to see logic in afew places.like one says above me...onclude some more shock in the girl when he says about his vampirehood.
 
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