Do you thin this is good im 11?

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ok the pitch is a pair of young twins find these gems that give them superpowers but when they're parents are killed by a sorccer they seek help from the Academy for the gifted a human/spider hybrid named Webster (se what i did there) helps them they get to the Academy finding they have a brother making them triplets they train and go to avenge there parents deaths here is a bit from one of the training fight scenes:

Webster leaned to a microphone and said "This is training defeat the droids" and sat back watching closely "All right Max what powers do I have"I said to myself and I did a back flip over a driod grabbing it along the way and flung it at the wall there was about seven left I shot a green energy blast at one and it went flying back into the wall I grabbed another ones arm and ripped it out of its sockets flipped around and grabbed it by the head and bashed it at a wall I cut ones head of by ripping its head of all of a sudden the other four conected together and became a 7ft tall monster droid I jumped the 7ft with ease and landed on its head I had got an idea my eyes glew green an dived into the gaint droids mouth as a ant I changed back into my human form and a green energy ball formed in my hand I released it and the hole driod blew up meanwhile Molly couldnt belive her eyes her brother just jumped into the droids mouth and the droids belly turned green and the hole driod blew up I landed on the ground "Very good quick thinking"said Webster "round two now you may have noticied after your first controlled transformation your echaned senses have kicked in you can hear feel smell taste and see better so destroy these three droids in this fog" he said and just at that moment a thick purple fog had rolled in and blinded me 'thump' 'thump' the sound was almost like seeing. My touch was so sensitive my smell was brilliant 'thump''thump' there it was again it sounded like it was from the right and I flung my arm out the thing I touched was hard and smooth it was a driod I picked the thing up and flung it to the ground I smelled oil I walked blindly following my sense of smell I came to a point were the smell was the strongest and let out a energy bolt I heard somethIng fall to the ground my ears picked up something close by "ARRRGH" I let out a scream as something hit my leg I fell to the ground next I smelled oil but it was moveing the smell kept on changing I clapped and a energy ring spread around me I heard the energy rings hit something I ran in that direction and bashed head first into the wall it was a unwinnable fight my head stared throbbing I did a back flip and I heard something hit the wall almost at once the smoke cleared I saw Webster sdanding up eyes changing from a dark purple to his normal browny green colour "Do you know how hard it is to do a thick mist illosion spell?" Webster said
 
yes... I would have definitely not be able to write that well when I was 21.
 
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