does my character sound boring or cliche? BE BRUTAL. Explain why?

Java

Member
She's 14.
if you like her, she likes you, if you hate her, she hates you
finds schools to be quite stressful and difficult usually
likes school mostly for the extra curricular activities and because she is not in the house
generally keeps her personal issues to herself
feels the most vulnerable when talking about her feelings, usually avoids this
if you do tell her something about your personal life, she will listen and try to comfort you
occassionally feels moody and irritable
has a large appetite
expresses herself better through actions rather than words
she is displeased with her acne and her flat chest
sometimes exaggerates or has a distorted view of her imperfections
most boys find her attractive, she sometimes enjoys the attention and sometimes dislikes it
occassionally, the attention inflates her ego, this had made her very choosy when it comes to boys, she has very high standards
she sometimes takes advantages of her annoying admirers
she generally an honest and objective person when it comes to others, but she sometimes has difficulty believing she is wrong
tries to get high grades, usually earns B's and A's
she is good in math and science
wants to go to 4-year university, not sure what to do career-wise
not interested in boys yet, finds them cute but not looking for a partner yet
priority is socializing and getting high grades
she has mild acne, she is not fat. I said flat-chested.
ok. thanks.
 

Jess

Member
Its rare you find someone with a large appetite and is thin.. (Flat chested)
Also guys at the age of 14 would find acne a pretty big turn off and most likely take the mick out of her rather than want to date her.
Well thats what the boys at my school would have done, maybe times have changed?
 
She sounds like every 14 year old girl on the planet. A lot of people would be able to relate to a character like this but you have narrowed your demographic quite a lot. Girls aged 12-15 would probably enjoy reading about a character like that.. anyone older or younger would most likely be bored by her.
 
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