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Okay so I'm writing a critical research paper about the societal significance of the music sharing/piracy movement and need help with the opening line. I want to write something like: "Ever since the creation of the internet..." but I feel that "ever since" sounds too colloquial and I want my essay to sound as mature as possible. I simply can't think of any other way to put it though! Please help.

Here is the introduction I wrote for my proposal so you can get an idea of what I am talking about:
Ever since the creation of the internet, people have found creative ways to use or exploit it. And now with the rise of the mp3 player, songs are most commonly found in digital rather than physical (CD) format. If one puts these two facts or ideas together, a controversial combination can be formed. The inevitable outcome of this combination was the music sharing movement, utilizing peer-to-peer networks such as limewire and file sharing services like megaupload to allow people to download whatever song they desire for free. So my critical question is: how has the eruption of music sharing networks altered the public opinion of what constitutes a crime?
Thank you all for your answers! I now have a better idea of how to start off. Comparing societal benefits and detriments of the internet sounds really good in the introduction too!
 
Hey dude. Your essay is great. I just made a little tweak in the introduction though. Hope this helps. Don't forget to choose best answer :)

The internet has been a part of human culture since its spread in popularity in 1996. The internet hosts several benefits such as the access to large data instantly and the connections it make to people from anywhere in the world. However not all good has come from the internet. Even at its early years people had found creative ways to use and exploit the internet. A prime example is the issue that has risen together with the creation of the MP3 player, where songs are commonly found in digital rather than in the classic physical CD format. If one puts these two facts or ideas together, a controversial combination can be formed. The inevitable outcome of this combination was the music sharing movement, utilizing peer-to-peer networks such as limewire and file sharing services like megaupload to allow people to download whatever song they desire for free. So my critical question is: how has the eruption of music sharing networks altered the public opinion of what constitutes a crime?
 
How about:

"Internet downloading of music has become a subject of controversy over the past few years Many of those who download music have found creative ways to exploit the technology, contrary to copyright laws established by the industry. With the introduction of the mp3 player, for example, more music is now being created in a digital format, instead of the standard compact disc."

Try that.. and you finish the rest!
 
The creation of the internet has resulted in a significant increase in the exploitation of music.. [then u could write about how they do do it and why its so easy to finish of the sentence?]
 
I wouldn't use "creation" and "creative" together, as they are derivatives of the same root word.

Possible other directions to lean toward:

"Though the internet has proven itself to have an abundance of benefits to society, it is also true that it has created the opportunity for a wide array of misuses."

"Since the internet was created, people have found unique ways to use or exploit it."

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They are really rough introductory sentences, but they might get you out of that writer's block. Maybe.
 
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