concise? Dear Prospective Partner,
Thank you for taking the time to review and consider this investment opportunity. It gives me great pleasure to welcome you to join our LLC.
[I have been working with professionals in the oil industry, alongside my son and fellow business partner Spencer [last name] over the last 19 years to create a platform for what we expect will be a substantial oil development.]
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*Side note: "My son and fellow business partner" this is a total of one person....its not 'my son + another business partner' .....any way you can help me either; thicken this up or just simply make it sound better would be great. Thumbs up points to everyone and best answer asap. =)
The main area I would like changed/edited would the area I put into brackets, but it could all use some help, as long as it sound professional, friendly, and concise. This is basically the start of a 'letter from the president' and I am happy changing absolutely anything at all. Any words can come or go. Thank you =-)
Thank you for taking the time to review and consider this investment opportunity. It gives me great pleasure to welcome you to join our LLC.
[I have been working with professionals in the oil industry, alongside my son and fellow business partner Spencer [last name] over the last 19 years to create a platform for what we expect will be a substantial oil development.]
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*Side note: "My son and fellow business partner" this is a total of one person....its not 'my son + another business partner' .....any way you can help me either; thicken this up or just simply make it sound better would be great. Thumbs up points to everyone and best answer asap. =)
The main area I would like changed/edited would the area I put into brackets, but it could all use some help, as long as it sound professional, friendly, and concise. This is basically the start of a 'letter from the president' and I am happy changing absolutely anything at all. Any words can come or go. Thank you =-)