My opening sentence seems pretty dull, but I don't want to get rid of it because I need this piece of detail as after this it goes straight into some dialogue, before the action happens (Car crash). So although I want to keep a short paragraph of explanation before anything else, I don't know how to make it interesting.
"Connie and Tony were driving back to HQ after a 12 O' clock break-in at a bank. They'd come away with much less than originally planned, and both were aggravated due to disappointment of the mission and tiredness- especially Connie."
What can I do with this? I'd like to know what words I should change, what I should change around or replace, etc. Thanks very much in advance, I will promise best answer!
"Connie and Tony were driving back to HQ after a 12 O' clock break-in at a bank. They'd come away with much less than originally planned, and both were aggravated due to disappointment of the mission and tiredness- especially Connie."
What can I do with this? I'd like to know what words I should change, what I should change around or replace, etc. Thanks very much in advance, I will promise best answer!