Jean looked around at all the tough friends he had laughing and drinking she wondered if they were just as dangerous. Jean noticed him look over at her a few times, was it because he knew everyone except her? Under the bright lights Catherine began to sweat buckets. No matter how much her makeup melted she always looked beautiful, under the white lights Jean noticed how everyone stared at Catherine she deserved it. Jean had always tried to help her get noticed. She had always been proud to walk in anywhere with Catherine, she had always been a strong willed person. Jean looked down at her dress and worried she didn’t look fashionable enough.
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