Ryder had come home with worse injuries, so when he walked through the door closing it behind him his Uncle smiled. “Good night?” he asked his scratch less nephew.
Pulling off his sweater he bundled his shirt in a fist, “Easy. It’s hot in here, where’s Emily?” leaning over he peaked into the kitchen, nobody.
Patting his shoulder Ryder’s uncle passed him, “She’s out with a friend. I think she said her name was Paisley.”
Rolling his eyes he entered the kitchen. Opening the fridge he pulled out a carton of milk. Reaching up to a cupboard he took out a bowl, “Another Venatra, or?” Abandoning what he gathered he went across the kitchen to another cupboard and took a box of fruit loops out. “Don’t tell me, it’s another mortal girl isn’t it?”
Mitchell took a seat at the small round table, in a begging tone he let his head fall into his hands, “Don’t give her a hard time about it.”
“Why does she waste time on them?” Ryder said with a mouthful.
“Maybe you could learn a thing or two from her,” Mitchell started, “go to school, make some friends.”
Almost chucking up his cereal he put his hand to his mouth. Swallowing it down before he spit it up, he snickered at the suggestion. “Friends? Don’t need them Uncle.” After another bite he sat across the table, “Besides, I’m much smarter than any of them. Going to school would be a waste of eight hours.”
“But you could like it, you may surprise yourself.” Looking into Ryder’s eyes he added, “Being normal for once isn’t bad.”
Putting a finger up, he broke the eye connection and looked down into his bowl again. Scooping pieces to fill his spoon he replied, “But being fake is. Emily will learn that soon enough.”
is this a good way to write dialogue between two people? is it interesting? I know you don't know what is happening or who these people are, I'm not asking bout that, i just wanna know if i present my dialogue well?
Pulling off his sweater he bundled his shirt in a fist, “Easy. It’s hot in here, where’s Emily?” leaning over he peaked into the kitchen, nobody.
Patting his shoulder Ryder’s uncle passed him, “She’s out with a friend. I think she said her name was Paisley.”
Rolling his eyes he entered the kitchen. Opening the fridge he pulled out a carton of milk. Reaching up to a cupboard he took out a bowl, “Another Venatra, or?” Abandoning what he gathered he went across the kitchen to another cupboard and took a box of fruit loops out. “Don’t tell me, it’s another mortal girl isn’t it?”
Mitchell took a seat at the small round table, in a begging tone he let his head fall into his hands, “Don’t give her a hard time about it.”
“Why does she waste time on them?” Ryder said with a mouthful.
“Maybe you could learn a thing or two from her,” Mitchell started, “go to school, make some friends.”
Almost chucking up his cereal he put his hand to his mouth. Swallowing it down before he spit it up, he snickered at the suggestion. “Friends? Don’t need them Uncle.” After another bite he sat across the table, “Besides, I’m much smarter than any of them. Going to school would be a waste of eight hours.”
“But you could like it, you may surprise yourself.” Looking into Ryder’s eyes he added, “Being normal for once isn’t bad.”
Putting a finger up, he broke the eye connection and looked down into his bowl again. Scooping pieces to fill his spoon he replied, “But being fake is. Emily will learn that soon enough.”
is this a good way to write dialogue between two people? is it interesting? I know you don't know what is happening or who these people are, I'm not asking bout that, i just wanna know if i present my dialogue well?