How is this introduction OF MY CHARCTER?!?

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This is a short summary of how the dude has been "awakened" : Nursed by careless solitude, a hospitalized child could only harken the frigid winds of this sweeping night. Like usual, he sang of nature with unceasing joy. The very few pedestrians and street-sleepers worshiped his voice like a deity. His eyes couldn't ever see a face, but he has never fell from the light of self. Remotely through his spirit, he could see his world, a world so surreal in reflection of that he hears. He use to share this hospital with his mother before her passing and now he slumbers here tonight for the same sickness his mother couldn't pull through - heart failure. Shortly before the break of dawn, the heart monitor weeped and the boys eyelids no longer weighed. Nurses broke the silence to confirm a flatline. They've deliberately raced death and ported the boy to another room before preparing him upon an operating table. The men in white gradually and carefully gathered to prepare the operation before cautiously proceeding open-heart surgery. A brunt, tumultuous roar broke from the child by the moment they have made an opening to his heart. Which abruptly released a sudden shockwave followed by a blinding flare. Every man were forced into a wall, others violently tumbled through the glass meant to seperate students spectating the operation. This child was no longer found. All they could report was a blinding flash rupturing from the heart from the moment they have made that opening, as if they have "unlocked" a mystery.

(I reposted since I had barely any feedback)
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Incredible. The character has so much depth,it's almost real, this would make an awesome sci-fi or pschothriller. I'd definatley read it.
 
That is amazing.. I love the short summary since it packs lots of detail.... and if you are asking for a character name, for some reason it think of Cyanide or Silas...
 
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