of it.? If you have any ideas on names, plots, other charcters. And some good critisim on how i could improve. thanks. im only 13, so dont be too harsh on it. Please give lots of ideas!
“Intro”
We found him at the front gate, on that stormy night. Lucky we found him, or else he probably wouldn’t have survived. The boy learned fast, faster than all the other kids his age. Soon he was able to fight people double his age and still win.
“In Dojo”
Students in line, dummies on other side of room. Takes turns at trying to destroy target. Each one punches target, making minimal damage. The kid (found at the gate”) runs at target leaps into the air and grabs onto rafter. As in air boy throws a dagger at target going straight through targets head. Then as grabs onto rafter, throws a sword and hits target smashing it too bits.
“Later”
Attack on village. The kid and friend escape, without attackers hearing. Just as they see there teacher getting attacked by a guy. They try to help but the attackers are to strong. Suddenly kid sees friend get struck by one of the enemies and cries out to him. When suddenly everything goes black.
“Later Still”
Kid wakes up in hospital, dizzy and feeling sick. He feels confused and wonders what he’s doing there, when suddenly he remembers what happened at his home town. He quickly asks if his friend ok. The nurse says he is ok, but has worst injuries than kid does. He asks if there were any survivors from the town. The nurse says the few that didn’t die, are missing.
“After they get out of hospital”
They get out hospital and go to look at their old home, all there is left, are burnt rubble. They swear that they will get revenge on the attackers. They try to earn some money for food from hunting a criminal with a price on they head.
thanks again. best answer will be given.
“Intro”
We found him at the front gate, on that stormy night. Lucky we found him, or else he probably wouldn’t have survived. The boy learned fast, faster than all the other kids his age. Soon he was able to fight people double his age and still win.
“In Dojo”
Students in line, dummies on other side of room. Takes turns at trying to destroy target. Each one punches target, making minimal damage. The kid (found at the gate”) runs at target leaps into the air and grabs onto rafter. As in air boy throws a dagger at target going straight through targets head. Then as grabs onto rafter, throws a sword and hits target smashing it too bits.
“Later”
Attack on village. The kid and friend escape, without attackers hearing. Just as they see there teacher getting attacked by a guy. They try to help but the attackers are to strong. Suddenly kid sees friend get struck by one of the enemies and cries out to him. When suddenly everything goes black.
“Later Still”
Kid wakes up in hospital, dizzy and feeling sick. He feels confused and wonders what he’s doing there, when suddenly he remembers what happened at his home town. He quickly asks if his friend ok. The nurse says he is ok, but has worst injuries than kid does. He asks if there were any survivors from the town. The nurse says the few that didn’t die, are missing.
“After they get out of hospital”
They get out hospital and go to look at their old home, all there is left, are burnt rubble. They swear that they will get revenge on the attackers. They try to earn some money for food from hunting a criminal with a price on they head.
thanks again. best answer will be given.