I need help with a conversation that I wrote. I think it is lacking alot of emotion.?

Jane

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(Jean's purse is stolen and she thinks someone did it on purpose bcuz there is a card inside her wallet with a phone number that says private drivers)

As they stepped out in front of the club entrance Jean showed Lilet the card.

“Look someone stole my purse and slipped this in.”
“Where did you find it?”
Jean hugged her oversized clutch. “The guy I was standing with found it.”
“Maybe he took it, but nothing was missing. I don’t know what to think.”
“It’s better not to talk to that guy.”
“Your right, I guess someone wants me to call this number.”
“I don’t think it’s safe.”
“I need someone to drive me to my grandfather’s cemetery.”
“I wish I could help, my car is getting fixed.”
“I’ll guess I have to take my chances.”

(rewrite this and win or give me TIPS)
 
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