I think it is finished...although I will probably change it 100 more times....

[Sher]

...Nonetheless.....what do you think? New York's Quiet Voice

My feet play a melody on this brick sidewalk,
Humbled, I think of who walked here before.
Cracks reveal that this path is well worn,
Millions of souls wandered this city I adore.

But, I begin to wonder, how many of them heard?
How many slowed long enough to listen?
Stomps and shouts, cars speeding by quickly,
This is the city's whisper that you've been missing.

The tender wind that blows all around you,
Is her way of saying "just walk around".
Forego the taxi, put your wallet away,
Be carried by only her rhythms and sounds.

Lose yourself in her harmonious words,
You may feel someone's dreams coming true.
That bench's paint is chipped and wearing away,
Perhaps someone great sat there before you.

I've stopped here to ponder many times before,
Yet every day is different than the last.
I am an explorer, this city is my voyage,
I hope it's future is as extraordinary as it's past.
I have only been writing for about a month now...this is my fourth finished poem. I know it is by no means professional quality, but please offer constructive criticism if you would like.

 

[Ben]

This is really good actually . Best I read in a while
Flows like a river . You definitely have talent

 

[ayylmeet]

Wow! Not only does it flow perfectly, it's powerful! =)

 

[destin_lite]

I could feel everything you described. It was wonderful. Your every word was an adventure. I think its perfect, I hope you don't change it. Spend the rest of your creative urge on more poems, lol I want to hear more.

 

[PasMal]

This flows beautifully, I would love to hear it read out. You have a marvelous skill with words that a lot of people don't have, or ignore. Please, grace the world with your poetry, it is lovely!