I wrote a short introduction and I can't provoke it! Plz help?

Elaine

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(I want a feeling of hope in her eyes and childhood memories. Add as much as you feel, I am not going to copy you I just need a great example of emotions and depth I'm not sure if this is right. Rewrite for the better thanks!!)

Amanda spent the last two hours decorating the fake twenty foot pine tree with red poinsettia flowers and silver bulbs. She took a step back and grinned admiring the way she she placed the white pearls in a zigzagged way across the tree in three tiers.
 
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