I've been mapping out a story about one of my newer characters, a 13-14 year old girl. She's being manipulated by a man to join his side of a war, in order to use her abilities against his enemies. He's a big part in telling her about her father, who died before she was born.
He has a somewhat rare ability to travel back and forth in time willingly and can take someone with him. He takes her into the past to show her father to her. I want the first thing he shows her to be her father's death, as I think that would really cement not only his bad side but also her as his ally. No one told her how her father died and he's willing to show her.
It's going to be really sad, really emotional. It's been really fun to map out. She's going to go from little whimpers and moans to near hysteric sobbing, but I also want her to be thankful. However I'm not sure how to show her being thankful after an emotional scene like that. It's certainly not right for her to be a blubbering mess and then go to throwing her arms around his neck and thanking him over and over again. I know a whispered "Thank you" as he holds her trying to calm her down could work but I don't think it's thankful enough. Any other ideas?
He has a somewhat rare ability to travel back and forth in time willingly and can take someone with him. He takes her into the past to show her father to her. I want the first thing he shows her to be her father's death, as I think that would really cement not only his bad side but also her as his ally. No one told her how her father died and he's willing to show her.
It's going to be really sad, really emotional. It's been really fun to map out. She's going to go from little whimpers and moans to near hysteric sobbing, but I also want her to be thankful. However I'm not sure how to show her being thankful after an emotional scene like that. It's certainly not right for her to be a blubbering mess and then go to throwing her arms around his neck and thanking him over and over again. I know a whispered "Thank you" as he holds her trying to calm her down could work but I don't think it's thankful enough. Any other ideas?