Is this a good introduction paragraph?

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“Hope- hope in the face of difficulty. Hope in the face of uncertainty. The audacity of hope!” The words of Obama are an inspiration. He’s a great man who listens to what the people want for a greater America; a man that has high hopes and shows true confidence in what he believes in. I absorbed every line, every sentence, and every word of the speech. His past had innocence and his dreams for the future made it clear to me of his love for America. Sure, hope and unity could give us a stronger belief in America. Sure, hope and unity could give us a greater bond. But, hope and unity can only get us so far.

I'm entering the 10th grade and I have to write an essay about the DNC Keynote Address Speech give by Obama in 2004.
I have to agree or disagree that hope and unity will solve all America's problems.
For this essay, I disagreed. What points should I add to my paper?

Please no rude comments about Obama or any party. It's great you have such pride for the party you're supporting, but I'm trying to keep it mature as possible.
 
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