is this a good introduction paragraph?

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I have to write about "My favorite business person" is this a good start?



In order to be a good business person you must be persistent, learn to easily adapt to change, assess risks, take charge, and be creative. Walt Disney had all of these characteristics and that’s why he is my favorite business person. Today Disney makes billions from merchandise, movies, and theme parks, but Walt Disney had a rough start and struggled to get where he wanted. He was fired by a newspaper editor because, “he lacked imagination and had no good ideas.” Then he started some business that didn’t last too long and ended with bankruptcy and failure. He never gave up though and eventually got the success he worked hard for.


let me know what to add what to take off or if it sounds good..thanks
 
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