Looking for feedback on my Poem

i like this poem..
Were no strangers to love
You know the rules and so do i
A full commitments what Im thinking of
You wouldnt get this from any other guy

I just wanna tell you how Im feeling
Gotta make you understand

* never gonna give you up
Never gonna let you down
Never gonna run around and desert you
Never gonna make you cry
Never gonna say goodbye
Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you

Weve know each other for so long
Your hearts been aching
But youre too shy to say it
Inside we both know whats been going on
We know the game and were gonna play it

And if you ask me how Im feeling
Dont tell me youre too blind to see

(* repeat)

Give you up. give you up
Give you up, give you up
Never gonna give
Never gonna give, give you up
Never gonna give
Never gonna give, five you up

I just wanna tell you how Im feeling
Gotta make you understand
 
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Often when people write poetry they try to be overly "poetic". It's about the beauty of words and granting them life-giving capabilities and hoping to instill this life into the reader, not impressing them. It's not the size of your vocabulary; it's how you use it. Poetry finally made me realize this in all my writing and has now become my primary form. Epiphany isn't just something black people name their daughters (I apologize if that's racist; it's a quote).
 
Woke up quick
At about noon
Just Thought that
I had to be in Compton Soon

I gotta get drunk
before the day begins
before my mother starts bitchin about my friends

About to go an damn near when blind
Young niggas at their post
Throwin up gang signs

Went in my house
Grabbed the clip
With my mac 10 on the side of my hip

Barreled outside an pointed my weapon
Just as i Thought
The fools kept steppin

Jumped in the 4
an hit the juice on my ride
I got front an back, and side to side
 
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