More metaphors. are these good too?

[mTwilightSagam]

A school of fish is a group of students no trying to break free and be on their own.

War is an explosion of all hate and anger in one process.

Tears are tiny droplets of sorrow that are formed in the most devastating moments.

favorite??

 

[Sammmm]

The first is rather good.
The second has potential, but the bit about "in one process" needs revision.
The third is a bit too cliche and emo. Opinion, of course.

 

[Sammmm]

The first is rather good.
The second has potential, but the bit about "in one process" needs revision.
The third is a bit too cliche and emo. Opinion, of course.