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I looked down at her. She was beyond gorgeous. Her beautiful, peircing green eyes were hidden behind her eyelids. I carefully removed a piece of her brown, curly hair from her face. Faintly, I could hear our mothers discussing her condition.

"What did you say happened to her, Maria?" My mother nervously asked.
"The doctors said the most likely cause was that she was having an out of body experience, and a demon took her soul to a paralell universe." Maria said between sobs. "I just don't know what I'll do if I can't get my Poppy back!"
"It's alright, Maria." My mother said, trying to life Maria's spirits. The doctor said it's happened before. How many times, maybe four?".
"Yes." Maria said quietly. "But they were only able to retrieve the souls twice. It's an extremely difficult process. Scientists have built a device that can transport you to other worlds, but it's horribly dangerous, and we have no volunteers so far."


Hearing that, I stood up from Poppy's bed immedietly. "I'll go" I said bravely. "If noone will volunteer to save Poppy, I guess I'll have to."
My mother rushed over to me and put her hand on my shoulder. "Now, Levi. Don't you think that's a little--"
"You'd do that, Levi?" Maria interrupted. "Oh my goodness, that's wonderful! Thank you so much! We better get your bags packed!"
My mother gasped. "My son will not be going! He's much too young!"
"I'm seventeen, Mom. I can handle it." I reassured my mother. "I promise."
My mother began crying. "But, Levi! Ten people have died doing that! Only three have made it, and one died in the other universe!"
"Mother, I can't risk losing Poppy."
"But Levi, you might die! It's--"
"Worth it." I told my mom. "I love Poppy with all my heart and I always have. I'm leaving before she has time to fall in love and stay there. If she falls in love there, she'll die here, and live forever in the other world. I'm going mother, and you won't stop me." My mother ran from the room sobbing.
"That's very brave of you , Levi." Maria said, elated. "Now, collect any and all pictures you have of Poppy with you. That way, she'll be convinced easier. Also, take some pictures of you with your mother and other people you love. That way, we can assure that you won't be stuck in the other world. And if you die, I want you to know that I've always loved you as a son." Maria pulled me into a hug. "Now, let's go, before Poppy falls in love." We raced out of Poppys room.
 
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