Review/ Critique my poem?

JustineT

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Stain

A door knocks
our breaths catch
Our blood cold

I see your tears
When you hear the news
A soul rattling sob
For each casualty

You fall into my arms
And your shakes
Quake within me

I feel the stab
Of each friend lost
I feel their wounds
As if they were my own
But your eyes
filled with pain
and shouts of desperate sorrow
Strike me
The greatest wound of all
Unbearable
As my eyes search in yours
For hope
and found none.

And then I know
What I would fight for
And then I know
I would fight
So I’d never see again
Those tears that stained my heart
 
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